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Yoyo's avatar

EEAAO is actually my favorite movie, this was a lovely read

Brent Piper's avatar

Same !

The Other Ending's avatar

There’s a tenderness in how panic, time, and memory bleed into each other here. I felt this more than I understood it, and that feels right

robenia's avatar

Thank you for reading. That's exactly what I was hoping for. The feeling first, the understanding after.

swedendrift | writer's avatar

Wonderful story. Keep them coming.

Sharmilajayauthor's avatar

Wow—just wow. Even without having seen Everything Everywhere All at Once, this piece reads like a cinematic fever dream, teetering between hyper-reality and intimate, physical immediacy. The sensory detail is astonishing: you make the reader feel the sticky floor, the harsh amber light, the sting of cheap sugar in a drink, the cold bite of metal, and the subtle, unsettling shift of time and self. is exactly the kind of writing that could translate beautifully to screen: immersive, kinetic, and emotionally charged.

robenia's avatar

Thank you so much. I’m glad you liked it.

Iris's avatar

I haven't watched Everything Everywhere All At Once, so it was a little confusing, but I enjoyed it nonetheless. It felt so of euphoric and hazy in the beginning in the best way possible, with a sharp change from the first scene to the next. Something about this was so equally disturbing and intriguing. I felt like I was experiencing it all.

John Dickinson's avatar

I haven’t seen the movie so it was a challenge to follow it but your style is wonderful. I love how descriptive you are…I could feel and sense what was going on as the action moved from one scene to the next.

I’d love some feedback on some of my pieces. My writing at this point is more snapshots than full stories. Here is the post that got the most engagement. Love to hear your thoughts. https://vignettesoflife.substack.com/p/46-years?r=5ieznh

Ikeagwu Chikasinma's avatar

Wow such a nice piece 🥹💞

You' re so good dear

Keep it up

Casey Murphy's avatar

I enjoyed this! Thanks for sharing it. Looking forward to reading more of your work!

Haseeb Chaudhary's avatar

You've written good piece. Keep it up.

Sara Hennum | Sara is Numb's avatar

Your images are so vivid I felt them in my body. The pebble and the blue fabric will stay with me 🩷

The_Stressed_GM's avatar

I don't think I entirely understood what was going on, but I also haven't seen Everything Everywhere All At Once, which would probably help. With that said I still really enjoyed this, especially the imagery you evoked with your prose.

itsmichelled_'s avatar

Loved it! The imagery was so vivid & encompassing, really immersed the reader well! Looking forward to future work (:

Serafina Alessi's avatar

I enjoyed your prose, the imagery is beautiful

Brent Piper's avatar

This was a great read, Everything Everywhere All At Once is one of my favorite movies oat, and I definitely feel this piece gives me the same excitement and awe as the movie did.

ivan’s nook 📚's avatar

what a wonderful piece! i, unfortunately, have not watched EEAAO yet, so i think i'm missing out on how the loops and timelines work. however, i'll come back to this piece again over the weekend so i can reread and understand your story better! <3

it's not you, it's me T-T

robenia's avatar

Awe thank you! Please tell me what you think after you watch the film

Chaddrick𝕵𝖆𝖍𝖆𝖆's avatar

I’m not sure I caught every layer on first pass, but the feeling stuck. the way each door seemed a different kind of humiliation, and the cost is time—he comes back older. And “Mutable” made the pebble feel like a trauma-token: small, ordinary, suddenly permanent.